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Tell yourself you'll wait until tomorrow,
The yesterday you never knew.
Let the skies wash away in loneliness,
And the air breathe with your heart.
Remember tomorrow as you move
Through the days gone by,
And dance with the bitter joy
That comes when yesterday was tomorrow.

Today is the moment,
Eternity stretched across
The singularity of time.
It's never ceasing, and ever present,
Yet always never here.
Fleeting faster than the light,
And dancing more joyously
Than we ever could.

So...
Tell yourself you'll wait until tomorrow,
The yesterday you never knew.
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That's all, folks.

EDIT: That first line is not supposed to be there, but I sort of like it... (Decided to remove it anyways "I really love that last line")
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AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Student Interface Designer
I love it, another instant fav! ^^
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: :heart: This one is pretty old.
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AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Student Interface Designer
But that doesn't mean it's not good ^^
I applaud you! :iconbwavoplz:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008   Writer
I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!!! :blushes:
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PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008   Writer
You're welcome! :)
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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kykiske20022003 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*o* awesome!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Heheh
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living4him Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008
I feel the rhythm.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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brisni Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008
:faint:

Oh my I love this one!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Awwww!! :blushes: Really made my heart leap a bit ^.^ I'm so amazed at my writing... how much people love it. All I know is that it's God empowering me. If you ever think I've forgotten that. Please slap me. (Even if it's not a real slap..) because I never ever ever want to steal His glory.
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brisni Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008
He has definitely given you ability.
You're doing a great job using it and practicing with it.

To God be the glory. :)
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Most trully!!
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008
If tomorrow is the yesterday that never came,
Does that make yesterday the hope for our future?
Will the same events just be repeated?
Are we just going around a one-track wheel?

I heard a theory, one that fits a child's mind.
Time is like a slinky, he said.
It forever goes round and round.
Although at times it seems to look the same as before,
Its really just another layer.
We are another rung down on the ladder we live to climb.

And then, a strong wind blows, the ladder bends.
Our rung touches one we've already seen again.
And then we can stay on,continue our path,
Or climb off into yesterday's freedoms and mistakes.

Ever wish to repeat yesterday,
Fix everything you broke?
The slinky just goes round and round.
Where it stops, nobody knows.

Does it even stop?
What if the two ends touched, and formed a circle?
Would we go on forever,
Our inertia powering us on.

So, if all that happens tomorrow,
Which is just yesterday in disguise,
(We'll never know it...)
Can it really be counted as tomorrow?

After all, can tomorrow ever really come?
All I know is it's always today...
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thank you so much for all the poetry comments, it means so much to me, especially since I am usually the only one who bothers... :hug:

Well, it's just today,
And ever now.
"Time is an illusion,
Lunch-time doubly so"
Or so said one Ford Prefect.

And all that matters
Is the now, the ever present
And the moment living
And breathing in this air.

And even if I could go back,
And dance the dances again,
To try and change this lonely world...

Well if I could, why would I?
It's the present that makes
Me who I am, but this present
Is the way it's meant to be.


Woah, I really love the last line ^.^
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008
You're welcome, I would have commented more, but I had to go to bed, this weekend I'll go through the rest of your gallery.
I love the list three lines, they're really mid-boggling, but at the same time makes perfect sense, you know? :slow:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks :D I really didn't expect even this fast of a reply (though I don't know why, I give them this fast :XD:) :D I'm honored that you want to go through my gallery.

If you find it too much, I can always pick out some of my favorites, as well ^.^
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
Most of the times, my replys are really sporatic. One day I'll respond to them all 3 times, and others I don't even get to all of them and they sit there for days.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
So I've noticed! :D
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008
:XD: Yeah, sorry about that...
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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MissTooni Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2008  Professional Filmographer
Oh yes! I love more abstract poetry than descriptive poetry. This is beautiful and gorgeous. ^^
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!!!
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jeannie64 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008  Professional Writer
i applaude you my friend truly a wonderful bit of penman ship i love im favin its just perfect xxj:hug::)
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!! :blushes:
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EgoRequiem Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008
mmm i guess it´s like when you say thing´s you´ll do tomorrow but never do! then tomorrow becomes yesterdays , the yesterday that never camE!

This is one of my favorites of your poems so far!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks :) It's sort of that.
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Yay!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Hehehe YAY!!
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Rojozorra Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
:hugs:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:s
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful Jake, simply beautiful.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbigheartplz:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
^.^
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ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
Oh, lol. It's still awesomeness incarnated though.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yes it is :) Which is why I wrote a poem on it!! D:
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ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
"The Yesterday you never knew." LOVE THAT. No words to describe it. Just love it.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, it's :iconourfinalsong:s though :)
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