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one.

I wish you could see that you aren't empty.  You're not worthless.  But everytime you say it, you just forget a little bit more.  I can't hold you up forever.  I won't always be around.

[You have to learn to live your own life, I can't keep doing it for you]

two.

I still remember those sun drenched days, and starry nights.  I still remember your voice, and the words we used to say.  And sometimes I still remember the regret and pain.  I try not to, but I can't help it.  I prayed for you the other night.  I wish you weren't so gone, even when you're not.

[How can so much regret remain?]

three.

I wish I could understand this thing called a heart.  Because I know I don't get mine.  You've been gone so long.  All I want is to hear you say hello.  But I can't.  You're never here.

[Whatever here means...]

four.

You always get so upset when we don't have the time to talk about everything.  I know you miss me, and I miss you too, but...  I wish I had all the time in the world.  But I don't.  I'm hoping someday you would find the right person for you, cause it seems every second I turn around you're crying over someone else.  And I can't hold you forever.

[Even if I try]

five.

I wish I wasn't just words to you.  Scratched words on a piece of paper is all you'll ever know.  But you're too much to just whisper at, and I don't know what I'm saying.  I never know what I'm saying.  You're just you, and I wish that you were mine.

[Because you never can be]

six.

Sometimes we're both so full of silence I think I understand you, but then... everything turns upside down.  You go one way, and then another.  I can't even understand at all who you are.  Someday, maybe?

[But only if you'll show me]

seven.

How can you see so much good in me?  How can you find in me all the places that are left unbroken?  I can't see them myself.  Somedays I wish you could find the real me.

[But you know we're both broken]

eight.

Somedays I wonder if we've passed beyond the realm of casual friends or not.  I never really know.  It's like moments we are deeper, but not for long.  I just don't understand how it could work out that way.

[Like a rope playing tugawar with no one]

nine.

How can you see so little good in the world, and yet so much in it's people?  Everyday, you find the little things in people that make us all remember just how much we're worth, but you fail to see that in the rest of the world.  You always are in so much pain, and so much agony over what you failed to do, when you can't see past the gray into the things you've always done.

[Someday maybe you'll see]

ten.

I feel like I've known you for years, despite the fact we just met only a few months ago.  I still remember the first time we talked.  But I don't remember anything we said.  It doesn't matter though, that's not the point.  You're a great friend, and I wish that I could ever match up to all of who you are.

[We never did answer that question...]

eleven.

I wish that you would see the real me.  I know you see the me I've made myself to be, but not the one I am inside.  I don't even try to hide it anymore.  But we're so conditioned to acting a certain way...  I'm not even sure what's broken inside, and yet I know that I'm not ok.  I can feel it.

[And you never seem to notice]
So I'm catching on the bandwagon of the whole "write something to eleven people that you would never tell them and leave it all anonymous."

*shrugs* most of these people aren't even on dA, but that's ok. Maybe I'll do one specifically for dA people some time?
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:icontalentedthruhim:
TalentedThruHIM Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student General Artist
It's totally all those things we all leave unsaid. Those things we can't seem to figure out how to say aloud, but they're so easy to write on paper. I have a million poems and other random snippets of writing where I just POURED MY HEART OUT and it was so easy. But I could never say any of it out loud. I guess we're all afraid. Afraid of what the other person might think? No, that's not it. Afraid of it not being the right time? No, never that. Afraid that we'll get hurt? Nah, it's not that. I think we're afraid of ourselves. I mean that's what I'M afraid of. Afraid of what we'll do. Afraid that it's not the right time for us. Afraid that we'll hurt someone else. Afraid that what we say doesn't matter to us. Because why should it? When the only things we actually ever say out loud mean nothing. So maybe, if we say those things out loud, they'll mean nothing too.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
A heart that can't speak
because its bound by invisible chains.
A whisper that is left in darkness,
when we are called to live in the light
as children of the truth.
We are the embodiment of sorrow
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:icontalentedthruhim:
TalentedThruHIM Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Student General Artist
So true. *smiles my half smile*
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: :heart:
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:icontalentedthruhim:
TalentedThruHIM Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Student General Artist
Yay! I got a hug :P
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Of course :huggle: Hugs are amazing.
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:icontalentedthruhim:
TalentedThruHIM Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Student General Artist
:ninjabattle: So are ninjas :P
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I call black ninja!

Hmm. I wonder if deviant art has a ninja hug emote..

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:)
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RedFawkes Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"sun drenched days, and starry nights"
god, J, this is fabulous. :heart: :+favlove:

probably my favourite line: "I wish you weren't so gone, even when you're not."
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:blush::blush::blush::blushes::blush::blush::blush:

Yeah, that line has a significance to me.
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RedFawkes Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it is beautifully written... I think your work has significance to very many people, myself included. :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Well I'm glad.
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:iconredfawkes:
RedFawkes Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: :love:
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009
What was the question? Do you really want an answer?
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Whether or not the universe exists within the mind of God ;)
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:iconuntittledstranger:
UntittledStranger Featured By Owner May 30, 2009   Photographer
OMGOSH!!!! I wanna try this!! It was really good. You really inspired me!!
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes: :heart:
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dynamitehackr416 Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
I didn't even read it as a "eleven things to eleven people" thing. It flowed as though it were one letter to someone. It kinda made me cry a little, you wrote it so well. I can really relate to it and feel a lot of the emotions, even the ones I'm not currently experiencing myself. Very very well written.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I intended it to flow like it was one letter, sort of. But it was to eleven different people.
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dynamitehackr416 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
When I went back and read it again (after knowing it was to eleven different people) I could tell, but only cuz I knew. I still lurves it :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :blushes:
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:icondynamitehackr416:
dynamitehackr416 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
one more point for me! but I think we stopped keeping track a while back...
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: I dunno, last time I checked the score was pretty heavy in your favor.
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dynamitehackr416 Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
That much I do remember :D
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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:iconliving4him:
living4him Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
One on there is for me, isn't it?
and I know which one....
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Maaaybe,
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:iconliving4him:
living4him Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
I hope you don't feel
like you have to catch me
anymore
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xxladouleurexquisexx Featured By Owner May 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
so beautifully written &...eee lost for words :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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chocolatemuack Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
very deep and beautiful and i love it !!!!! :heart:
:+fav:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: :heart:
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner May 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I think I will hop on this bandwagon too!

It's so... beautiful and delicate. I love how you phrase things. It's so poetic and so meaningful.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner May 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
<3 :giggle: :blushes: Thanks! You should, you should!
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner May 8, 2009   Writer
i think you have more beautiful things to say to people than I ever could have.
this is incredible.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Aww. :heart: :blushes: I'm not so sure they're all that wonderful... :hug: But hey, I'm just a nice guy with a soft <3 :aww: :giggle:
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ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
Bandwagons can be fun. Would I kill it if I joined too though? Hope not. Lovely way with words! Some so sad, some so happy, all so beautiful.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :giggle: Thanks! And you should!! :blushes:
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ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
Okay, I'll write it later today then, woo! haha...
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kochany-deszcz Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
:heart: 3, and 6. I wish i could say them to someone. but he won't listen anymore. I'm sure of it.
:(
but anyways, wonderful idea. I love it.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Tis not my idea :giggle:
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:iconkochany-deszcz:
kochany-deszcz Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
Well then, tell whoever's idea it is that it is a wonderul idea :) haha
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: I dunno who's idea it was originally. I stoles it from :iconpaperheartsyndrome:
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:iconkochany-deszcz:
kochany-deszcz Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
haha well its a good idea :)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yush it is!
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
oh, haha. I had no clue that like, these were different people until I read your note. I'm like... "doesn't quite make sense, but ook..."
Ook, so now that I understand that. It's really good. =] I love the wordage. :)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks =) :P
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fierypoplartree Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
this is an interesting idea.
you have wonderful things to say to people.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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