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i still think i'm sundrenched thoughts
and wateredup phrases of longfound dreams.
i still remember those starlit nightskies
and whispered iloveyous found beaten
on the corners of broken curbs.
i can't escape these thoughtsideaswords
that shine from your moonlight eyes:
i am whispered conversations in a smile.
wateredup phrases are all I'll ever be
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living4him Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2009
even if you are only falling water from the sky
eventually when you hit the ground
you will phase into a puddle;
everyone knows
what it takes to make a mighty sea
it is that single water droplet
that you claim to be
that the eyes of the angels
have cried.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: :huggle: Thanks Lauren :aww:
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living4him Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009
welcomes!!
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2009  Student Writer
Wound up like too many springs; the tendrils of a vine, coiling.
Interesting use of words.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :love: Thanks so muchh!
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2009  Student Writer
:heart: No problem.
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NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Professional Writer
I love every line of this! Wonderful style!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :love:
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SweetBlackRose13 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That's amazing.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :love:
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ourfinalsong Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009
Ooh--it has a beautiful flow to it! Lovin' the thoughtsideaswords part, and the whole idea of thoughts shining from eyes is just such a fluid, gorgeous thought... Anyway, just love it overall. You're so good at moving words around so that people can relate to them. :heart:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:love: Thanks! :heart:
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PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009   Writer
I like the imagery of cracked curbs... I like that you used "wateredup", instead of a phrase I've heard "watered down".
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah. I loved when I thought up "watered up" :heart:
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PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009   Writer
:meow:
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flawedfairytale Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009  Student Writer
The name got me interested, and rightly so. :heart:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:love: This one was a lot of fun to write. I loved the idea of a "watered up" phrase. Rather than watered down.
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SamNickole12 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Student Photographer
Beautiful. :heart:

:hug:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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BlueSilverUU Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009
Interesting...
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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Awasteof-paint Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009
SO MUCH LOVELIESS IN SO FEW WORDS. :love:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:love: :heart: :blushes: Thanks! :giggle: :blush: :love:
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Professional Writer
you know thats not so bad, if you were dried out you'd crack easier
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Professional Writer
besides being all wateredup seems to make you good at writing :)
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Hehehe :heart:
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Professional Writer
i haves to go to bed, school tomorrow, night
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Night :heart:
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Professional Writer
morning, time is 7.59am and i better go grab my toast and leggit for the bus:L
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: That was midnight for my time haha :heart:
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