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Washed in blood
will you ever be set free,
Of pain so great
in your bitter heart?

Wishing and waiting
Someday to find
That your Justice
is done.

I'm not saying
that what he did
is right!

But was I?
Were you?
Is anyone?



No



We have tongues
Like vipers,
Hands of Iron
and Fists of steel.

Words now soft
and ever pleasing to the ear
are turned to Poison
in the whispers of
Hatred and Despair

Smack went the Hammer,
As Thunk went the Nail.
It was my hand, your hand, Our hands
That drove it home.
Wrote this on one of :iconcheizi:s poems. And I really like it.. so here we are.

Updated this a little, because I didn't like the flow of some of the stanzas :aww:
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:iconsarinsky:
Sarinsky Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009
amazing.. you're a great writer..Love it. :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :blush:
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:iconskyeconnelly:
skyeconnelly Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2009  Professional Photographer
Really enjoyed this one too.. :D
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thanks!
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:iconmidnyghtlilith:
MidnyghtLilith Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009   Writer
Interesting... *ponders*....
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Mmmm :)
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:iconsao-irse:
Sao-irse Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2009
share your skills?
:3
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wish I could.
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:iconsao-irse:
Sao-irse Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
:hug:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: :heart:
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:iconrenia-vandolrin:
renia-vandolrin Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009   Photographer
very touching
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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:iconkazumisangel:
kazumisangel Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
"We have tongues
Like vipers,
Hands of iron,
And fists of steel.
Words now soft,
And ever pleasing
To the ear," I love this verse, it's so sad and so true. We love to croon sweet things to others and destroy them while their eyes are closed. :heartbreaker:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah...
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:iconblown-into-oblivian:
blown-into-oblivian Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
very powerful
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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:iconblown-into-oblivian:
blown-into-oblivian Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
^^
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:iconone-yellow-flower:
One-Yellow-Flower Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009   Writer
oh wow

this is my favourite so far <3
esp the last stanza...
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
<3 :heart: Yeah... this is probably one of my most favorite pieces :)
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:iconalovelymeinside:
ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
Very moving, very.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!
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:iconrojozorra:
Rojozorra Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Interesting. :heart: :D
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thanks!
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:iconrojozorra:
Rojozorra Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2009  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You are welcome :D
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