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I call you my stareater:
You've caught my dreams.

I call you my dreamcatcher:
You ate up all my stars.

Now we're just a room
Full of empty people,
Wishing and waiting
For the moment
That never will come.

We were whispers
Of a winter wind
Caught in a storm.
But it's gone now.
You're gone now.

You're just a dreamcatcher
Who can't catch me now.

You're just a stareater
Who can't hurt me now.
Response to [link] by :iconpaperheartsyndrome: (Specifically the line "I call you my stareater since you take away my dreams)

:heart: Hope you enjoy. It's a bit on the sad side though.
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saarSEZ Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2009  Student General Artist
I love it :heart:
dunno why but I can relate to it very well in my own way, it perfectly describes how I've been feeling the past few days, it's great to finally find the words for it ;D
so thank you for that (:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
<3 :heart: Thanks :)
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:iconchocolatemuack:
chocolatemuack Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
you're so talented!! :glomp:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: :blushes:
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. :)
your wording is perfection, and you bring a very... mature feeling to it. (and I mean mature here as the opposite of immature. =P) maybe I'm not making sense, but anyway. I enjoyed it, and thank you for sharing this.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: Thanks you sooo much for reading and enjoying my words. :heart: :aww: :blushes: :iconheartgiggle:

(I shall now go and see your gallery)
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
oh! urm. it's not worth it. definitely.
but no problem. it was a pleasure to read. =]
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
But it was. So definitely worth it.
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. =]
I think, to go through your gallery, I may just have to split that up over a couple days. xDD
But here we go. :)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
If you want, I can pull out the pieces I like (or my readers like) Because there are... a whole lot.
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Hah... uhmm... I don't know. xD While I enjoy seeing the evolution, or de-evolution of writers from their newer to older work, I'm not sure if I have the time for 300+ deviations... xD
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly, that's why I'd be willing to find some of the more exemplar works.
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Lilielo-Lawliet Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
i would love those jobs. especially dreamcatcher. like the fox catching the baku
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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Lilielo-Lawliet Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
:?
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Very lovely!!
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconemmyisazebra:
EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome :)
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living4him Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
This is you. :hug:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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xxladouleurexquisexx Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
sad & so beautiful - i love how your writings/thoughts get to me :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :)
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009   Writer
[ps. i linked this to mine. Is that cool?]
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: absolutely!
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paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009   Writer
you're too brilliant. [which I'm sure I already said.]
My favorite line is
Now we're just a room
Full of empty people

it's such a wonderful metaphor.

I love this.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :giggle: :aww: :blushes: (You're too brilliant)
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009   Writer
:heart: [you're more brilliant. arguing's my favorite thing to do, especially when it's the good kind of argument. ]
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: [Maybe you just can't see how bright you shine, and how it outshines me]
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009   Writer
[hey, you shush. how about we shine equally bright, okay?
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Ok ok ok *grumbles* :giggle: :heart:
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Now we're just a room
Full of empty people


That is my fav part of this poem! Must go fav this poem now!:D :+fav:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome!:)
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ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
Sad or no, I loved it. It just brings such a surreal feeling to very real emotions. Amazing. :)
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!
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