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But there is music,
Lost in the fires and flames.
It gurgles and dances
With every flickering light.

And the music is soft,
But grander than the sun.
The words to which are lost
In the dance that is never
Learned nor taught to anyone.

Even the ashes dance
With a wordless joy,
And the wood gives light
For its silent harmonies.

Remember all the days long done
And all the time we've never had.

Remember the air, as it burns
With a heat now harsh, now soft.
And all the words spoken above
The flames. That's the dance,
And the music of our time.

That is the hour spent "wasting"
Away. And yet still more meaning
is left there than anywhere else.
Wrote this in response to [link] by :iconourfinalsong:

Hope you enjoy! :hug:
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andar90 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010
I love the metaphor you use and the way you use it within the poem. You also have some great personification in here as well. Nice work.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
<3 Thaanks so much. :)
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oneofthose-rachels Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2009
this is plain amazing. and i have no words to describe how much i like it or how well you've strung the words together. the images blow my mind. :heart:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: :heart: :aww: :blushes: I think this is probably my all time favorite. This or "Dear Justagirl" :giggle:
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flawedfairytale Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2009  Student Writer
"Even the ashes dance
With a wordless joy" I love the imagery this conjures up. Very nice piece. :aww:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This is another piece in the running for favorite.
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. You really just described fire, to me.
Great, great, great poem. =D
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platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That's the idea ;)
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
lol. yeah. durrr.
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NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008  Professional Writer
i absolutely adore this!
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