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But there is music,
Lost in the fires and flames.
It gurgles and dances
With every flickering light.

And the music is soft,
But grander than the sun.
The words to which are lost
In the dance that is never
Learned nor taught to anyone.

Even the ashes dance
With a wordless joy,
And the wood gives light
For its silent harmonies.

Remember all the days long done
And all the time we've never had.

Remember the air, as it burns
With a heat now harsh, now soft.
And all the words spoken above
The flames. That's the dance,
And the music of our time.

That is the hour spent "wasting"
Away. And yet still more meaning
is left there than anywhere else.
Wrote this in response to [link] by :iconourfinalsong:

Hope you enjoy! :hug:
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:iconandar90:
andar90 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010
I love the metaphor you use and the way you use it within the poem. You also have some great personification in here as well. Nice work.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
<3 Thaanks so much. :)
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:icononeofthose-rachels:
oneofthose-rachels Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2009
this is plain amazing. and i have no words to describe how much i like it or how well you've strung the words together. the images blow my mind. :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: :heart: :aww: :blushes: I think this is probably my all time favorite. This or "Dear Justagirl" :giggle:
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flawedfairytale Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2009  Student Writer
"Even the ashes dance
With a wordless joy" I love the imagery this conjures up. Very nice piece. :aww:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This is another piece in the running for favorite.
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:iconsimplysamwise:
simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. You really just described fire, to me.
Great, great, great poem. =D
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That's the idea ;)
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:iconsimplysamwise:
simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
lol. yeah. durrr.
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NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008  Professional Writer
i absolutely adore this!
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :D :heart:
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:iconniennaswift:
NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008  Professional Writer
you're very welcome
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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:iconwritingisart2:
writingisart2 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008
the descriptiveness *_*

it's glorious. And strangely, almost abstractly beautiful. Well written and excellent usage of words. :clap:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: :D

This is pretty much my favourite work, I think.
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writingisart2 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008
firefirefire :D
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
8D
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008
"Remember the air, as it burns"
Don't ask me why, that line is just perfect. It just inspired me, I don't know how it could, but it did.
I love this one, there is life and hope in everything.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks so much!! And for the inspiration :)

That's soo cool!!
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Well written! If I may say though, there might be a slight error in your third stanza. In "For it's silent harmonies" the "it's" should not have an apostrophe. I used to make that mistake all the time... It should read "For its silent harmonies."
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LaTul1pe Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008
:iconxxxallessandraxxx: :)

lol just realized you have the same icon as someone who reads my poems. For a moment I thought you are her!
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:icontsirachel:
Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha... It was supposed to be a temporary thing but I just never got around to changing it. I should probably do that...
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :) Yeah, I always got/get confused because 's means possesive when referring to a person like "Jakes" vs "Jake's"
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, totally. I always got those mixed up until about a year ago. :D
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2008
What always helps me is to imagine the sentence with "it is" instead. If it doesn't make sense, don't use the apostrophe, if it does, feel free to use it. That's how I learned it, way back in 1st grade, and I still use it now.
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, I know that stuff... you know how some people just struggle with certain things... like the -ence or -ance endings, or the whole "i before e" thing... yeah, my biggest problem was with the "its vs. it's"
And I only just figured out how to make that work for me instead of against me.
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2008
Yeah, I know what you mean. I can never figure out when to drop the 'e' or not, English is too complicated. I wish there weren't so many rules and exceptions...
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Our problem is that we borrow things from other languages so often, and break all of our rules. That doesn't happen in other languages. Imagine how boring a spelling bee would be in Spanish--everything is spelled exactly how it sounds.

People think that French is complicated, but they actually stick to all of their rules; once you figure them out you're basically set.
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2008
True, I've been in a Spanish spelling bee, it was incredibly boring. It took forever for people to get out, and that was mostly because they couldn't remember how to say the letter. :XD:

French is only complicated because of spelling with silent letters and a couple gutteral sounds, but once you know them, it's easy enough. Not that learning languages is easy, it's just easier when you know the tricks.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Haha :P I do better now, but I should edit more :O
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
EDDIT!!
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
So intersting! It's almost like explaining why watching the place burning is so calming! great peom as always.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks for the wonderful comment!!
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
No problem. by the way, I it's calming to watch the fire place burning you know. just a little typo. He-he!
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It is. Fire is soothing, and yet can be so full of passion and rage. It's an interesting thing to watch, in nature :)
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah nature has always been an interesting thing to watch, though.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Sure has!
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living4him Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008
This put a smile upon my face. I love reading your poetry.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :) This is officially my post popular deviation by far now... 26ish favs vs 18.
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EgoRequiem Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008
you really are at a different level!!! GREAT POEM!!!!
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!
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varawdn Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
i like how you described it. it made it... more real to me. i think that's how i want to say. anyhow, i really liked it, and it's definitely an instafav.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yays! ^.^ This is my most popular piece now :wow: It has something like 20 favorites...
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MissTooni Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008  Professional Filmographer
Nice, but after reading the first two lines I got "Through the Fire and the Flames" stuck in my head. XP Thanks a lot. Just joshing.

I think the structure of this poem really conveyed the flame, so rhythmic stuff didn't bother me at all. I also liked your use of bolds, italics, and underlines. ^^
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :) This is certainly one of my better pieces. As for the rhythm, I paid a little more attention to this one, since I wanted to capture the flames, which have a natural "rhythm" to them :)

Glad you enjoy it!!
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ALovelyMeInside Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
Really touching! It painted an image so vividly, I could practically see the flames as I was reading it. Two thumbs up!
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yes! I love when I can get the visual so perfect with the words ^.^
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ourfinalsong Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008
I still can't get over how beautiful this is! It has definitely made me look at what I was initially writing about in new ways. And here, even through the nostalgic tone of the writing, a clear and certain hope seems to shine through. I absolutely love the ending, as well as the third stanza. <3
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: :blushes: <3 Thank you so much!!! ^.^ I really enjoyed writing it. I sort of just... wrote it from my heart after reading your piece. :)

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