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And here I stand again,
whispering words I know
that she will never hear:

It's drowned out by a
shriveling darkness of words
so harsh and broken.

When I speak of beauty,
she hears shouts of emptiness.

When I whisper love,
she only finds hatred
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BunnyHeadWounds Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2009
Beautiful... :)
I've been wandering through your gallery, your work is simply wonderful.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
<3 :blush: Thank you so much!! :hug: PS: I love your signature.
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living4him Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
wow, very well worded. I'm impressed. It's like a gunshot. Bang.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2009  Professional Writer
Hearing what you want..
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
We all hear what makes it through the stainglass filter that makes us who we are. No one really hears what someone is saying.
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NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009  Professional Writer
I've seriously just been comtemplating that concept!! I love it how we're ont he same page... Tibetan Buddhist's say your mind is just a crystal, and everything it percieves is perceived through filters that aren't necessarily true..
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Something like that :giggle: I just think the "unquestioned" beliefs we hold at the inner part of our mind/being color how we see things. Often we don't even know that we believe something. A good example: some psychologists say that if you were to ask an anorexic to look into a mirror and you could actually get an image of what they perceive in the mirror you would see someone overweight. Because their mind colors what they see.
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NiennaSwift Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2009  Professional Writer
That's true. I've had eating disorder issues and you never see what's true. When I was 14 I was anorexic, and when I was 16 I got to my lowest weight, but thought I was huge, didn't look any different to myself. Now that I've balanced out I realize how skinny I was and wish I had enjoyed it then, instead of seeing someone huge in the mirror.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :hug: That's gotta be very tough to deal with.
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oneofthose-rachels Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2009
this is interesting (:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :heart:
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Tsirachel Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how the last line ends without punctuation. It just makes it so powerful... *sigh*
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:love: Thanks :heart:
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Professional Writer
does she ignore you or just not know how you feel?
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It's not romantic.
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
whats it about?
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It just is.
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poetcourt Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Professional Writer
that's very profound i must say
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
What great poetry. In a just short four stanzas, you've spoken more to me than if you had written a whole essay! Instant Fav!:+fav:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :heart:
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
No problemo!
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BlueSilverUU Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009
Beautiful, you've captured that part of human nature quite well.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Too true. I wish it weren't.
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