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Even the... by =platinummyr:iconplatinummyr:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Spiritual > Fixed


Even the wrong words seem to rhyme.
Even the right way is a crime.
Even the darkness sounds a chime.
Even the circles look like lines.
Even the sweet things taste like limes.
Even the hurting seem so fine.
Even the thirsty pay a dime.
Even the hungry cannot dine.
Even the water tastes like brine.
Even the acid looks like wine.
Even the boots can't make the climb.
Even the freedom seems to bind.
Even my thoughts can't stop my mind.
Even my faith shall fail sometimes.
©2006-2009 =platinummyr
:iconplatinummyr:

Author's Comments

This is a poem I wrote after hearing the line "Even the wrong words seem to rhyme."

Hope you enjoy it. The poem is about the fallacies in the word today, and the many things that just don't seem right.

EDIT: Changed a few of the lines in the middle of the lines. (Mostly from seems to another word). Hope you enjoy, especially new watchers.

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~emerald-lit May 22, 2006, 1:11:52 PM
I LOVE IT!!! It really has a lovely flow to it. I like the contrast in each line.... Very lovely.

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live to love, love to fight, fight to be free, be free to love


check me out here: ~emerald-lit
or here: ~emerald-rose
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=platinummyr May 22, 2006, 1:13:14 PM
Wellz, yah, the flow is pretty simple, I can even sing it.

--
*TheWritersMeow
We’re all victims in a battle that we never had to fight
It’s ok it’s alright, steady now we’re in this thing together
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~emerald-lit May 22, 2006, 1:14:34 PM
yeah but I still like the flow... hehe.

--
live to love, love to fight, fight to be free, be free to love


check me out here: ~emerald-lit
or here: ~emerald-rose
:iconplatinummyr:
=platinummyr May 22, 2006, 1:42:13 PM
Well, the flow was ripped from a song XDD

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*TheWritersMeow
We’re all victims in a battle that we never had to fight
It’s ok it’s alright, steady now we’re in this thing together
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!fallingfreefalling May 22, 2006, 4:14:41 PM
Even the hurting seem so fine.
Even my thoughts can't stop my mind.
Even my faith shall fail sometimes.

Those are my favorite 3 lines. Wow. I liked that. A lot. It's really true. All of it. Nice.

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And it still is there.
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=platinummyr May 22, 2006, 4:29:34 PM
Thank you very much,

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*TheWritersMeow
We’re all victims in a battle that we never had to fight
It’s ok it’s alright, steady now we’re in this thing together
:iconneverryou:
~neverryou May 23, 2006, 9:34:39 AM
:jawdrop:....ok now...am i like..speechless...this is such a BEAUTIFUL poemmmm!!!!wow..
wowwowow...wow..can't stop...hey this is overwhelming....it's just sospecial!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...

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without you i am nothing
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=Magaman May 23, 2006, 11:48:26 AM
:omg: u just-tt d-id the UNTHINKABLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :hug: WELL DONE BRAH! :hug:

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I am a Christian!
"Quit you thinking like men. Think like God!"

+sis
+Random.Friendly.Guy.001
-Izzakku Ansoni Hatsuharu-
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=platinummyr May 23, 2006, 12:32:50 PM
THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! :glomp: :glomp: I didn't expect THIS much from people!!

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*TheWritersMeow
We’re all victims in a battle that we never had to fight
It’s ok it’s alright, steady now we’re in this thing together
:iconneverryou:
~neverryou May 24, 2006, 8:45:01 AM
you should have!!now you know!!!!its awesome!!!!!!!!!!

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without you i am nothing
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