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Broken hearts
Can't be mended
With a stolen hammer,
Nor fixed with
Iron fists.

Broken stars
Crash longingly
Into the crest
Of eternity,
Wishing for an end.

But it never comes.

Whispers of
That nameless fear:
Love,

Broken hearts
Are mended
On the back
Of unrelenting sorrow.

Broken stars
Fall into your hands,
Where words craft
A bridge to nowhere.

That's exactly where you are.
Wrote this for :iconpaperheartsyndrome: on one of her pieces of lovely wonderful stunning poetry.

Go. Read her stuff. Now.
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:icontrelore:
TreLore Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2009
beautifully said
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thanks.
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:icontrelore:
TreLore Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009
welcomes
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fierypoplartree Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
i love the nowwhere part.
it's special.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:iggle: It was much fun to write!
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:iconfierypoplartree:
fierypoplartree Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
i can imagine. :)
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simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I read this one in the comments of :iconpaperheartsyndrome:'s poem. =]
It's great. I love the "no where" and "now here". it's like, a word play, or something. and that's always my favorite. :)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:D :heart: Yeah. This was fun to write :giggle:
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:iconsimplysamwise:
simplysamwise Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
it looks it. :)
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:icondaughterofzion:
DaughterofZion Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009   Writer
...wow. It's like you took love & heartbreak and captured it with words...
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: :heart: :blushes: Blame ~losingmyfaith for that one ;)
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:icondusk-of-stars:
Dusk-of-Stars Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009
omg that was gorgeous :heart:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :heart:
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Dusk-of-Stars Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
yw
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:iconrenia-vandolrin:
renia-vandolrin Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009   Photographer
"Broken stars
Fall into your hands,
Where words craft
A bridge to nowhere"

That's my favorite part. Beautiful job again :)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconrenia-vandolrin:
renia-vandolrin Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009   Photographer
your very welcome :)
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jeannie64 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Professional Writer
awqesome work hon its different from your usual gendre but still as good if not better your maturity in writing is fantastic keep the good work up hon im watching even though it may take time for me to reply or comment okey dokey xxj:hug::)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :heart:
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:iconchocolatemuack:
chocolatemuack Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
:love:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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dynamitehackr416 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
mrawr!! I lufs this! It's so pretty!! :iconcarameldansenplz:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: :giggle: Thanks soooo much :iconheartgiggle:
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dynamitehackr416 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009
of course!! :iconheartgiggle:
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
W00t! :iconheartgiggle:
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:iconwhydoidothiseveryday:
This is beautiful, i loved it, the imagery was amazing
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: Thanks!
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xxladouleurexquisexx Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:

Its oh-so-beautiful...& so emotionally written
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Thanks!
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SuperEvee Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Broken stars
Fall into your hands,
Where words craft
A bridge to nowhere.

That's exactly where you are.


Yet another stanza that will echo in my head long after I turn the computer off today. Wordsmithing at its best. n_n
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes:
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Leslie-Elizabeth Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009
This is really fantastic. I like the first verse about the broken stars falling into eternity.
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for the :+fav: :heart:
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Leslie-Elizabeth Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009
Of course.
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009   Writer
Yay!
You did post it.
As I told you before it's brilliant.

(and the nowhere is magic)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Magical deliciousnessss! :heart:
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009   Writer
haha, now, I want lucky charms. thanks. =)
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
OOooh mee too!
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:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009   Writer
I know, all we have is stale cheerios though, which clearly doesn't equal the awesomeness of lucky charms. ):
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:iconplatinummyr:
platinummyr Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Clearly. A definite not as good.
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